Nathan Revadigar
Charles Ippolito
Core Biology
5/10/17
"Watch: Fishermen Catch Venomous Sea Snakes." National Geographic. National Geographic
Society, 02 May 2017. Web. 10 May 2017.
http://news.nationalgeographic.com/2015/01/150108-sea-snake-gulf-thailand-harvest-animal-ocean-conservation/
Current Event 11
The article, “Fishermen Catch Huge Numbers of Live Venomous Sea Snakes” by Jane J. Lee is very well written with a few downsides. The author begins the article with a very interesting and shocking video about her topic and then starts with a good lead that hooks his readers into reading the article. A particular reason that this article caught my eye was because I have always had a great interest for snakes, especially snakes with special talents such as being able to live under water. Lee wrote this article about the capturing of sea snakes in Thailand, her main topics covered the main reason why they collect them and the risks of it. In order to help the readers of her article understand her topic better, Lee included many pictures and a video. These crucial visuals made the article easier to understand. Lee did a good job of providing her research resources. She made most of her article based off 6 or 7 sources who provided her with very rich and important details about her topic.
Although Lee provides her sources, there are a couple downsides. For example, when she began her article, she had a very good lead but immediately included a fact that kills the interest of her newly introduced article. “Some die from snake bites, according to a recent study that suggests the snake catch may be one of the biggest hauls of marine reptiles in the world.” This line makes the reader lose some interest in reading her article. The conclusion that Lee wrote for this article was mediocre, but it didn’t wrap up the entire article. Her conclusion was very abrupt as she was talking about using snake venom as medicine and an ending at that point doesn’t even seem possible yet there was one. It didn’t allow the readers to fully understand the article and it didn’t wrap up what she was talking about, it only summarized the second half of the article. The conclusion was ended with a quote that left the readers with a question in their mind. Throughout the article, Lee did a good job answering most of the main questions but if she had answered a couple more questions, the article would have been very informative. For example, what does the venom of the snake in medicines treat besides heart attacks? Also, what about the snake venom makes it a medicinal ingredient? If these questions were answered then people would have a better understanding of the properties for snake venom.
This informative article was well-written and had a lot of evidence to b. The most impressive aspect of the article was the way in which Lee was able to explain the new research and the way that it can be used to cure certain problems.. Lee explained the research that was conducted very well and cited several scientists who were able to explain the work on a deeper level. The author had great detail that drew my attention to reading through the lengthy paragraphs. The detailed interviews added a much needed depth to such a difficult concept to grasp. This work will go on to inspire future scientists and hopefully, when there is a breakthrough and potential cure for diseases will be created. I have recently developed a liking toward articles that contain information on cures and remedies and this brought a new angle to what I have been recently reading. Most of the articles I have read have focused on the use of herbs but snakes of all animals is very fascinating.
Caroline Brashear
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Core Biology
May 10th, 2017
Current Event 11 Comment
"Watch: Fishermen Catch Venomous Sea Snakes." National Geographic. National Geographic
Society, 02 May 2017. Web. 10 May 2017.
http://news.nationalgeographic.com/2015/01/150108-sea-snake-gulf-thailand-harvest-animal-ocean-conservation/
Nathan wrote a current event review about the article, “Fishermen Catch Huge Numbers of Live Venomous Sea Snakes,” which was overall well-written. One aspect of his writing that I liked was that he included a direct quote from the article in his second paragraph, which made his critique even stronger, and allowed the reader to relate. Also, it was good that Nathan provided a few downsides to the article as opposed to just stating well-done aspects of the article; this made the experience more interesting for the reader and made for an honest review, which is important. Lastly, Nathan enhanced his critique of the article by using several examples that paraphrase the text from the article. In particular, he asks his own questions that he would’ve liked the author to answer, which shows that Nathan gave his article a thorough-read before writing his review.
Nathan’s review was mostly well-done, but there were a few things he could improve on. For example, I would’ve liked him to give a more detailed summary of the article so that I could better understand his critique and be able to know exactly what the content he read was focused on. Additionally there are a few typos in the review, which Nathan could easily fix by giving his work another proof-read to delete any mistakes.
I was drawn to Nathan’s review because it discussed snakes, and I am interested in reading about animals. This review was a good-learning experience for the reader, as it highlighted the key points of the article. I was amazed and surprised after reading this, as I would never think that snake venom could be used as medicine. This unlikely concept could develop into an important scientific breakthrough.
Julian Thomet
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Bio IH D135
30 May, 2017
"Watch: Fishermen Catch Venomous Sea Snakes." National Geographic. National Geographic
Society, 02 May 2017. Web. 10 May 2017.
http://news.nationalgeographic.com/2015/01/150108-sea-snake-gulf-thailand-harvest-ani
mal-ocean-conservation/
Current Events 13
For this week’s current events, I read Nathan’s review of the article “Fishermen Catch Venomous Sea Snakes.” The article was, as the title implies, about a group of fishermen who had caught some venomous snakes. Nathan did several things well. For one, the review was well written. Apart from one or two issues, the grammar flowed well, and thus it was easy to understand what he was saying. This is important, because it made his points more well communicated. Another thing that Nathan did well was the amount of time he spend reflecting on the article he was reviewing. This showed that he was paying attention to the article he was reading and not just taking all the information he was provided at face value. Actually thinking about the information is a good way to ensure that the reader trusts one’s view about the information. Finally, Nathan referenced images and videos, which often go unappreciated in these articles. Although they don’t contain as much information as some of the writing, they are still an interesting way to better understand the information, and it is good that Nathan acknowledged them.
That said, there are a couple of things that Nathan could improve on. First and foremost, it appears that Nathan used the wrong format to write his review, so it is very difficult to understand the ideas he is portraying. There is very little in the way of actual content contained within his review. This makes it harder for the reader to understand what the article is actually about. Another thing Nathan could have done to improve his review is include a section about how his topic pertains to society. Although this may be a little bit difficult for an incident as seemingly isolated as the one that Nathan was writing about, it might still be nice to read about whom his topic affected.
This article was a bit surprising to me, because I didn’t know about a lot of the information in this article. For example, I didn’t know that snakes lived in the sea. Another thing that was interesting to me was when Nathan mentioned the fact that snake venom may actually cure heart attacks. This is very interesting, and it shows that some things that could actually be used to kill us may have medicinal purposes as well.
Kathryn Haggerty
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Core Biology
September 20, 2018
Current Event Comment 2
"Watch: Fishermen Catch Venomous Sea Snakes." National Geographic. National Geographic
Society, 02 May 2017. Web. 10 May 2017.
http://news.nationalgeographic.com/2015/01/150108-sea-snake-gulf-thailand-harvest-animal-ocean-conservation/
For this week's current event, I read Nathan Revadigars review about the article, “Fisherman Catch Huge Numbers of Live Venomous Sea Snakes,” which was quite fascinating. One aspect of his writing that I liked very much was how he provided a direct quote from the article itself. This in turn made his critique even stronger, and allowed the reader to relate on several points through his review. Second, he was able to pinpoint the mistakes made by the author. Instead of just pointing out the upsides of the article, he mentioned every aspect, whether good or bad. Finally, Nathan provided several questions that he himself had towards the article. This in turn shows that he gave his article a thorough-read before writing his review.
In terms, I believe that Nathans review was pretty well done. However, he made a few mistakes throughout the write up. First, there are multiple instances where grammar and spelling are incorrect. This in turn points to the fact that Nathan did not proof read his review after writing it. Secondly, Nathan failed to mention how his article and review related to society and reality. In doing this, it is hard to understand why this topic is currently important. Overall, Nathan did a great job of reading and pinpointing the importance of this article to the reader.
Initially, I was drawn to Nathans review of this article because I love sea animals. I love to swim and especially love the ocean. This article highlighted how amazing it was that snake venom could be turned into medicine. It is crazy how the one thing that is thought to hurt you, could in turn save your life. This fact is very interesting and points to the fact that there could be more things out there that we fear, which could actually help us.
Alex Doukas
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Core Biology
November 18, 2018
Current Event Comment 8
"Watch: Fishermen Catch Venomous Sea Snakes." National Geographic. National Geographic
Society, 02 May 2017. Web. 10 May 2017.
http://news.nationalgeographic.com/2015/01/150108-sea-snake-gulf-thailand-harvest-animal-ocean-conservation/
After reading the review written by Nathan and his discussion about the article, "Fishermen Catch Venomous Sea Snakes," I found that the overall review was very well written. He explained his opinion about the topic which brought more insight to the reader about the venomous sea snakes. I think that it is important to include outside information and an outside perspective about that certain topic and Nathan incorporated direct quotes from the article which brought the reader to broaden their knowledge about his critique. Lastly Nathan included direct facts from the article and put it in more simpler and interesting words to engage the reader which is a main aspect people should consider when writing a critique.
The aspects in which I think Nathan could have improved upon is the format and the grammar that is presented. I felt as if everything was out of sorts and hard to understand at times and there were occasional typos and incorrect spelling which he could have fixed just by proof reading it one more time. Another thing Nathan could have included to conclude his critique is how it relates and why it is important to the society because without this, we are unaware of why it it a current popular topic.
Overall, this specific topic caught my eye because although I do love animals, i do not know much about their ora and what they do in the wildlife. The title of this caught my eye because I am always willing to learn more about snakes. It was fascinating to read that snake venom could cure heart disease and the many that find snakes dangerous and scary and do whatever they can to distance themselves when they see this living creature, I bet that they aren't aware that they can save lives.